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Friday, 11 August 2017

😃 The Poor And The Rich 😃





😃This was very hard to come up with an a idea for my writing but then in the future it got easier.😃

First I made a plan.

😃Secondly I wrote my first paragraph and draft

Lastly I wrote the rest then revised and edited it.😃
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My resource was the revise and edit card.😃

😃Please leave a positive comment and some positive feedback.😃




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  1. Anonymous15 August 2017 at 13:27

    Hey Riley,
    I really enjoy the way this sounds, the rhyming is effective and your metaphor is makes it easy to visualise.
    Next time perhaps you could include your model (everything is everything).


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  2. Anonymous16 August 2017 at 12:44

    Hi Riley,

    Could you add some punctuation please theirs not very much in your writing.

    Kind regards

    Rhumour

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